Wednesday, 18 September 2013

Abel's Marvellous Poem!

People huddle together in the street,
It's raining and it's light with Iphones.
People stand in shops warming themselves,
As green lights signal the cars to go.
The sky as black as cat's fur,
Umbrellas are like shields fighting splinters and daggers.
What a fantastic poem, Abel! I am so impressed and I am sure our readers will be too. Abel was inspired by his walk home from school in the rain. I think this is a marvellous poem- I love the idea of umbrellas acting as shields and I can just picture the light of the Iphones on the wet streets. Fabulous!


Roderick said...

Its FANTASTIC Abel I heard about iphone5s was coming and it was on the radio

Antonio said...

WONDERFUL poem Abel!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Ella.F said...

Wow,abel! I really love your poem! I can really imagine that happening on a rainy day!

agatha said...

I like Abel's poem.

agatha said...

The part I like is people playing on there I PHONES

Theadora said...

Its an amazing poem abel i like how you said people were in the shops warming themselves

Antonio said...

AMAZING POEM ABEL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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