Monday 5 October 2015

'Trapped': A Poem by St. Clare's Class


Last week we worked together to write a poem as a class. Following the dramatic events of 'The Templeton Twins Have an Idea', we wrote our poem on the theme of being kidnapped.

The children offered ideas for lines for the poem and we wrote them on strips of paper. We made sure that we included some similes, metaphors and alliteration.

 
Then we made a ladder with the strips of paper and moved them around until we felt that it was in the correct order. We then went through the editing process, changing a few words to improve the rhythm of the poem and adding punctuation where necessary. Our final job was to come up with the perfect title for the poem. 

Here is our wonderful final poem- we are very proud of it!

Trapped

Fear has taken over,
The damp dungeon smells of last night's meatloaf,
The dungeon is a fearsome forcefield.

Tied with tape like a mummy's bandages,
Our hope is melting like a snowman in spring.

A slug stopped in its tracks by salt,
A mouse trapped in a mouse trap,
A helpless lamb trapped in barbed wire,
A pathetic cow trapped in an abattoir.

Fear is swelling like the water inside the Titanic.

Will this change our lives forever?


By, St. Clare's Class, October 2015


7 comments:

Daniel :{) said...

It was really fun doing the poem

Daniel :{) said...

Can we do it again Mrs Parrott

Jada said...

I agree Daniel.

Elizabeth said...

I loved the poem abut being trapped

Justin said...

This is the best poem i have ever seen in my life

darcy said...

i really loved doing them and we all made AMAZING poems, we could be professional
poets!!!

Maria&Caoimhe said...

it is a great poem!:)

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