We improved this boring sentence:
The rain hit the roof.
Add your best super sentence below as a comment. You could also say what you like about other children's super sentences. Remember to be positive!
Tuesday 9 October 2012
A Rainy Day
In our Challenge Books, we wrote some exciting sentences about a rainy day.
We improved this boring sentence:
Add your best super sentence below as a comment. You could also say what you like about other children's super sentences. Remember to be positive!
We improved this boring sentence:
Add your best super sentence below as a comment. You could also say what you like about other children's super sentences. Remember to be positive!
24 comments:
The rain thundered down on the thatched cottage, beating to a rhythm.
I think you can improve this sentence by adding adverbs and adjectives e.g The rain pounced on the playground floor.It sounded like bull's running
The rain hit the roof very loud and it bashed on the side walls and it made me very cranky.
I enjoyed this lesson.Thank you Miss Benn
I enjoyed it too!
The rain pounced on the roof drowning all other sounds.
The game was fantastic.Thank you.
yeah I agree it was amazing
The rain dropped on the roof heavily.
The hail stones blitzed the roof.
The rain washed the cobwebs, it was very heavy.
The rain battred the giant roof.
The heavy rain smashed up the old roof.
The heavy rain can break the roofs.
The poring rain hit the shiny glass roof
The rain hit the roof that was made out of cotton wool which was soggy
The roof is metal and the rain drops an it dangerously.
The rain was so heavy that some houses fell down
The rain pounded like drum beats on the roof heavily.
The rain was so powerful the whole land was broken to peaces.
This loooks well.
There are some truly super sentences here- but there are lots that are missing a full stop! Always end your sentence with suitable punctuation. Keep the comments coming! Miss Benn
The rain banged hardly on the roof so everyone can hear it.
The shivery flow of frezzingness blows past the roof
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